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laden with sky
we stumbled
and painted mockingbirds
on loveless branches
folding in our slender limbs
and ducking under our own
voices, fidgety and frail
against the wall of night.

between the dipping blades
and drawn shoulders
we learned to craft our words
steady-soft,
a drumming rain
that carved canyons
in open hearts and
drew the sunshine to
our supping lips.

keen-eyed, we watched
remembering the weight
of unseeing eyes
and scalding remarks
and we learned to slip
the noose-knots and slide
through the soul-cracks
and somehow
build kingdoms under
upturned noses.

with lyrical uncertainty
and tender determination
we built a pyre of peace
in the shadows
of dissonance
and watched it blaze
the truth across our
pliant hearts.

as solemn
as new leaves still curled
and stretching hands
unfurled in suppliance
we lifted our heads
in broken laughter,
for this light is our burden,
and even a whisper
can shatter silence
and bring the blind
to sight.
One candle against the dark, one breath breaks the silence.

Did you know everyone is a rebel at heart?

***Edit***
A DD?!?! I am honored--and beyond thrilled!
Thank you so much to everyone who takes the time to read my work, and rest assured I will respond to each of your comments and faves (though it might take some time). :heart: :love: :heart:
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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-11-08
The suggester says "Truly, I can feel the weight of the world in these words. All of it. Every ounce of pressure that composed each and every line, pressed them into words, I can feel it weighing on my shoulders." for unseeing eyes is by *Pailei ( Suggested by Carmalain7 and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome--thanks! :)
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. The second stanza is beautiful.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. Sometimes quiet rebels accomplish more than their louder brethren ever could. ;)
And thanks so much for the fave!
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I reckon you're right there c:
You're welcome!
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SolarumNyx Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh god, this is beautiful. the contrast of the imagery and the flow of the words, plus that tiny strand of lyrical dissonance makes this such a wonderful piece. i swear, i wish i could write like this. love, love, love it!
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thank you so much! I'm glad you like it. :aww:
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CodaBear48 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Student Artist
Simply Amazing :D
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:iconpailei:
Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thanks! And thanks so much for the fave! :heart: :aww: :heart:
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WolfsoulPhoenix Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that was beautiful. :)
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:iconpailei:
Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thanks! Glad you liked it. :aww:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
Wonderful. Congratulations on your D.D!
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! :heart: :aww: :heart:
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racharita Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
What beautiful words! a joy to read, thank you.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
And thank you for taking the time to read and comment! Glad you enjoyed it. :aww:
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Emiko-CatOnFire Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I especially love those last four lines.
I don't even know what to say; that was so amazing..
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, because they're about hope. Hope blooming into victory against the odds, and the glory of small miracles.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :aww:
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ArbiterGirl Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That was so fucking beautiful I can't even can.

I have lost the ability to can.
I'm crying. Holy crap.

Tears. Down my cheeks.


I don't understand.




You have so much talent.
So much talent it hurts.
Oh my god.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my god, don't cry! :tighthug:
I cannot tell you how much your words mean to me.
And I am beyond grateful that my own humble words mean something to you.
Thank you so very much for taking the time to read, comment, and fave. I truly appreciate it. :heart:
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What a beautiful piece. :heart: I love the lines:

and painted mockingbirds
on loveless branches


Congratulations on the DD! :D It's very well deserved!
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My favorite lines, too! :aww:
Thanks very much for your kind words, and for the fave!
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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Galimatias123 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
Really beautiful. Great usage of words and the way that they are presented. Loved this
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And thanks so much for the fave! :aww:
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Ssiem Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As I read on, the poem became more and more beautiful! And the two sentences in your description feel like part of it, at least for me. I like it very much, well done!
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, thank you! Those two sentences are what it's all about, really. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :heart: :aww: :heart:
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SpagettiFox Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is... so beautifull; and elegant and soft; I absolutly love it and this deserves to be in a poetry book.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thank you for such kind words! I really appreciate that you took the time to read it and comment, and I'm glad you liked it. :aww:
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SpagettiFox Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it was my pleasure! ;D
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my, I'm swooning immensely.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh goodness! Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :aww:
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KikitoSan Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully breathtaking.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. :aww:
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TwelveThousandSteps Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student General Artist
This is simply just... beautiful! ;A;
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thanks! Glad you liked it. :aww:
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AviAngel-Flycir Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing! Congrats on the DD :D
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thank you so much! :heart: :aww: :heart:
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AviAngel-Flycir Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :D
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neurotype Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the natural imagery most in this. I'd love to see a clear movement through time of day--you open with night and it seems to end with daytime (based on 'light'), but it's implicit.
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, the natural world is my usual reference point. So much inspiration there. This actually takes place over years...a lifetime, really, but I get your point. Usually I use seasons to denote the passage of time, but certainly the movement of light could denote that as well. Thanks so much for the feedback! :aww:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
:la: Congrats on the daily deviation!
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! :heart: :aww: :heart:
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
:huggle: You're welcome!
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AFineWar Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on your Daily Deviation :clap:
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Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :heart: :aww: :heart:
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mewpheebee Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student General Artist
This poem is so beautiful!
Congrats on the DD! :)
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:iconpailei:
Pailei Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thank you! :heart: :aww: :heart:
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mewpheebee Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student General Artist
No problem :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
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